教学笔记：2022年3月学军中学月考应用文）旅游观光类

（学军中学2022年3月）假定你是李华，寒假期间你出门旅游，旅途中你给你的英国笔友Chris发一封电子邮件，内容包括:

1.你所在的景点;2.你的旅游经历和感受;3.你的下一个目的地。注意:1.词数80左右;2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生给英国笔友Chris发一封电子邮件，告诉她你所在的景点日记的格式及范文教案，你的旅游经历和感受以及你的下一个目的地。

1.词汇积累极好的:great→fantastic一……就:the instant→instantly/immediately/the moment微妙的:subtle→delicate随时和某人保持联络:keep sb.updated→keep sb.informed

2.句式拓展简单句变复合句原句:I’m having a great time in Putuo Mountainone of the Four Holy Buddhist Mountains in China拓展句:I’m having a great time in Putuo Mountain,which is one of the Four Holy Buddhist Mountains in China

【高分句型1】It was a long drive but I found it worthwhile the instantI set foot on the island.(运用了the instant引导的时间状语从句)【高分句型2】Thebeach is also a nice spot,where Ispent a quiet afternoon wandering around and picking up beautiful seashells.(运用了where引导的非限制性定语从句)

范文：Dear Chris,I'm having a great time in Putuo Mountainone of the Four Holy Buddhist Mountains in ChinaIt was a long drive but I found it worthwhile the instant I set foot on the island.The temples scattering among the mountainsimpressed me and their long history and subtle sculptures kept me in awe.Ieven made a wish there.The beach is also a nice spot, where spent a quiet afternoon wandering around and picking up beautiful seashells.Tomorrow I’m leaving for Ningbo.I'll keep you updated!Love,Li Hua

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旅游类题目练习：

（江苏海头高级中学高三）假定你叫李华，你在国外某城市旅游期间发现有些旅游景点存在一些问题。请你针对这些问题，给当地旅游管理部门的负责人写一封建议信。内容包括：1.你发现的问题；2.你的建议。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】

Dear Sir / Madam,I’m writing to tell you something about the problems in some scenic spots in your city.First, visitors couldn’t get timely service in some scenic spots. Second, some workers were not friendly enough. A worker became obviously impatient while answering visitors’questions.To better these conditions, workers in the scenic spotsshouldbe trained in customer service skills.Meanwhile, those hotels had better be fully aware how important adding new food and creating a cleaner dining environment are. I’d appreciate it if my suggestions could be considered.Looking forward to your early reply.Yours faithfully,Li Hua

【分析】本文书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封书信。

【详解】第1步：根据提示可知，本篇是一篇书信：你在国外某城市旅游期间发现有些旅游景点存在一些问题。请你针对这些问题，给当地旅游管理部门的负责人写一封建议信。内容包括：你发现的问题；你的建议。

第2步：根据写作要求确定关键词，如：in some scenic spots（在一些旅游景点）；the unused tickets（未用过的票）；have a tight schedule（时间很紧）；provide enough varieties of food（提供足够种类的食物）等。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态语态问题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。

【点睛】本文是一篇书信，格式正确，内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。文中使用高级句子：

培优练习：

下面这篇是一个相对较难的文章，类似于四级的写作水平，程度较好的同学可以研究一下，从中借鉴一点写作短语和表达方式（难度虽然有，但是表达方式是可以借鉴的，自学能力强的学生可以自主学习）

随着经济的发展和人们生活水平的提高，近年各地旅游景点人满为患，尤其是一些历史名胜，如长城、紫禁城和各地大型博物馆等等。看到这种趋势，一些旅游景点开始考虑提高门票，并把此消息在各大网站上发布，这在全国引起了一场热烈的讨论，观点如下：

支持者：

1.促进当地经济的发展。2.景点需要雇佣更多的工作人员提供服务并尽快清理游客留下的垃圾。3.门票提高可以确保建筑物的维修。

反对者：

1.人们将失去休闲放松的地方。2.阻碍人们尤其是青少年了解中国的历史和文化。3.对于有历史意义的名胜政府应该提供经济援助，而不是依赖民众多掏腰包。

你的观点：

表明态度，列举至少两点理由

参考词汇：maintenance维修（n.）financial经济的，金融的

注意：1.对所给要点，逐一陈述，适当发挥，不要简单翻译。2.字数150左右。开头已经写好，不计入总字数。With the development of our country’s economy and the people’s living standards improving,a lot of tourism attractions in different areas have witnessed a great increase of tourists in recent years, in which case some tourism sites are considering adopting higher tickets fees and have given out the news on various websites. People have held a heated discussion about it and opinions on it are divided. _____________________________.

【答案】Withthe development of our country’s economy and the people’s living conditions improving,a lot of tourism attractions in different areas havewitnesseda great increase of tourists in recent years，in which case some tourism sitesare consideringadoptinghigher ticket fees and havegiven outthe news onvariouswebsites。 People have helda heated discussionabout it and opinions on it are divided。The supporters think the first reason is thatthe increase ofticket fees can promote the local economy。 Secondly, the tourist attractions need more employees to providetimely serviceand remove the garbages left by the tourists as quickly as possible。

Besides,themaintenanceof the buildings also needs a large amount of money。On the other hand,those whoare against it list their reasons as follows。First of all,it will make people lose theplaces for relaxation。 Next, this move willdiscouragepeople especially teenagers from learning about the Chinese history and culture。 Last but not least,faced withthis situation, our government rather than the average publicare supposed togive financial support。However, I’mon the side ofthose opponents。 Because we need some opportunities to enrich our life and broaden our horizon。

In addition, I must remind those tourists who have the habit to litter around to watch their behavior in public places, which can more or less reduce the work of the tourism sites。

【详解】

试题分析：写好提纲式作文的关键是认真审题和分析所给的提纲，因此考生首先要认真阅读前面的提示，认清写作要求和提纲之间的关系，然后确定文章的主题、文体、人称和时态。本文的主题是对热门景点门票上涨的讨论，给出了主要的观点，学生的语言力求准确、简洁。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性。考生必须认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等。

【亮点说明】学生要根据提纲写出全部的观点并添加自己的观点。文章使用了很好的短语和句子：promote，timely service，rather than而不是，a large amount of，discourage，on the side of，broaden our horizon开阔眼界，litter around乱扔垃圾日记的格式及范文教案，

句型丰富多变：the first reason is that the increase of ticket fees can promote the local economy表语从句，who are against it list their reasons as follows.定语从句，who have the habit to litter around定语从句，which can more or less reduce the work of the tourism sites.非限制性定语从句，

文章的一大特色是运用了多样的连接词，比如：Secondly，Besides，On the other hand，Next，Last but not least，In addition使得文章条理清晰、结构明了。

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